The same great intuitive writing talent I've seen in the Dark Maji series is also observable here but this series while initially enjoyable ultimately shows a very weak execution.
The plot as well as the world seem pre-planned, well designed, and are interesting but the actual execution is full of more or less small inconsistencies that add up over time.

I am mostly not talking about classical plot holes here but about irrational and illogical behavior.
The problem with these kinds of flaws is that, beyond destroying my immersion, it becomes increasingly difficult for me to see these characters as real people. I can't trust them anymore to act consistently according to their characterization which means everything becomes entirely arbitrary as the author might at any time intervene and bend any character in favor of the plot. That makes it feel cheap.
And that is exactly what's happening here. Honestly, it's just lazy writing. The MC in particular has a lot of issues any one of which only exists as long as it is convenient and vanishes for the rest of the time.

Additionally, I had a big issue with one of the other protagonists.
Maverick was a useless piece of entitled shit up until the climax of book two but even that wasn't nearly enough to redeem his angsty ass. What I found baffling was that the author seemed to expect me to genuinely like him despite him just constantly being a brat for no effin reason. I can understand the rude sarcasm shell of the MC. She has good reasons for why she acts how she does but Maverick doesn't. Honestly, he is even worse than Olivia. With Olivia, you at least get exactly what's on the label. No BS.

While the author is pretty good at "show, don't tell" most of the time, she does something very counterproductive I've observed in the Dark Maji series as well. She tells the reader about character traits that she never shows. It's like she knows that the character wouldn't actually behave that way and she can't properly show the character exhibiting these traits but instead of realizing that she just constantly tries to tell it to the reader as a substitute along the lines of if you repeat it just often enough maybe the reader will eventually believe it. No, that's not how this works. It's just really disorienting and frustrating and makes your characters unbelievable. One example is (again) Maverick. He is supposed to be loyal but he never once displays any kind of loyalty except maybe being protective of his family. But that is nothing special especially considering what kind of prejudices he has towards the MC. Later he is invested in "protecting the MC" but half of the time he is the reason she gets in trouble in the first place. Which is sometimes being mentioned at the time but always forgotten about immediately after. And anyway, he is just madly in love with her. That is not loyalty. Those are teenage hormones.

Another problem I've spotted here and there is "show and then tell". Please trust your readers to understand the clues. Don't tell us afterward how to interpret your "showing".

All in all, a lot of the issues are things I expect to find in a still raw draft. A good editor should've addressed some of the issues as well. But honestly, while a fair amount of time probably went into planning and preparation, the writing just seems to be low effort. ( )